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Start.Stop.Continue speech #4

Group Members: Nick, Chris, Ling
Product name: Trax (shoe company that tracks kids)


Classmates Moves:
1.AI: I really enjoyed this presentation! I thought it was very clever to begin the presentation how the actual Sharktank show starts. This made it very entertaining. The video was probably the best part of the presentation because it incorporated everyone in the group and really showed the amount of effort put into this presentation. It grabbed the audiences attention due to it being funny and the visual effects kept me entertained. This presentation was a great performance, I liked the way they kept it real by sharing their thoughts out-loud to keep the audience involved in what was going on. I would definitely try to be more entertaining when I have to do another speech. This was a great skit and reminds me that sometimes you just have to put on a show.

2. The Dump: This presentation was very well put together, everything from the storyline to the powerpoint. The actual blueprint of the dump was a great way to tie in the theme of their presentation. Everyone had a good amount of talking time and that made their presentation even more interesting. Their rotating character was definitely the highlight of this presentation, it really showed that this group had thought about all the possible counter arguments and provided a solution to each one. This group was very well organized and really thought through all the oppositions. I will keep that in mind next time I have to give a persuasive speech; show knowledge on research and explain counter arguments. Answer the audiences questions before they are asked.

3. Tar-off: This group was very clear and concise on what their product was and what it did. I enjoyed their skit and their video on how it affects not only humans but animals. They really tugged at the emotion of the audience but kept it entertaining by using humor, especially with their tar-genie. What I will take away from this group is that sometimes you have to set the right mood with the audience and use different stats or videos to convey a message. Their product was tar-removal but by using videos of the animals and expressing their concerns it helped make the audience realize that this is a serious issue!  They stated a problem and offered a solution, and the fact that they had props was a big plus!


Start:

• Speaking up a little more
• Although I did not speak in monotone, I believe I can improve the tone of my voice throughout the presentation to sound more convincing
• Be more clear on what we are presenting. We went over the rhetorical situation very well but we could of done a better job at explaining Ling's background story.
• Better transitions between slides. I started alot of slides by saying "ok" and "so"

Stop:

• Saying Um, using filler words
•  Looking at the screen. I had to read most of the statistics on missing kids and I could not memorize all the information. 
• Looking at my group members when they are speaking, I should be looking at the audience and only look at them when we are talking to each other. 
• "Winging-it", I know I shouldn't memorize my lines but it helps me be more confident and it is a way of learning the material. In this presentation I really had to improvise and just go with the flow. 
• When I was going through a slide that I wasn't too familiar with, I spoke faster and tried to just get it over with. This made me look less confident 
• I tried to speak a little slower this time but there is still room for improvement 

Continue:

• Using hand gestures to emphasize key points
• Having good body language 
• Having a good visual aid to help express idea
• Using props like the shoes just to make the presentation more tangible 
• Doing research on the topic, we looked up actual stats on missing kids and did research on Deckers shoes
• Putting time aside to practice and getting comfortable with the topic and all the research
• Making the presentation as realistic as possible
• Dressing up or playing the part

speech 4 outline

 

Group Presentation Outline

Group members: Ling, Nick, Chris, Linda

Product name: Trax- a children shoe line that has a built in tracking device that is accessible through a mobile application.

Rhetorical situation: We are a shoe company pitching to Deckers in Goleta.

Roles:

Ling- acting as the CEO co-founder of the company. She created this product from a personal experience. Will go over counter-argument

Linda-will go over statistics on missing children

Nick- will go over competition

Chris-Go over success rate

Slide Outline:

Commercial:  Ling will appear in a short commercial displaying a mother loosing her child

Introduction: All the group members will introduce themselves

Going over stats: I will be going over the stats on missing children

Solution: Why we came up with the product/ benefits

Competitors’: other ways of tracking children (video surveillance, credit card, phones)

Success rate: Battery life, how many families have benefited from our product

Start,Stop,Continue Speech #3

Classmates moves:

·      I really enjoyed Canyon’s animal testing speech. It was very obvious he had done a lot of research and was able to give facts to backup his opinions. It

was very well put together and the overall speech was very convincing. 

·      Ryan’s sweatshop speech was very impressive due to the amount of research and logic he put into it. He was very confident in his work and had facts to prove his points.

·      Jake’s speech had a lot of emotion, which really helped convey his message. He took a really radical idea and used the power of emotion to trigger a sympathetic response from the audience.

•      Each of these presenters used facts and data to persuade the audience. For me personally, the stats helped convince me into believing their radical ideas. Logic, facts and emotional attributes were the key ingredients in these presentations and that is what made them so effective.

Start:

•    Speaking more slowly and clearly. I get nervous and speak fast. Looking back at my video it is hard to understand some of the words I am saying.

• Pausing when needed to emphasize key point. The only time I pause is when I am changing the slide. I would like to feel confident enough to pause during my speech without making it seem like I forgot my next line.

•    Meeting the desired time. My presentation was short thirty seconds and although I had practiced, when it came down to presenting I got nervous and skipped a few main points I had originally wanted to share. 
•  Giving a brief overview at the end of the presentation. A lot of people zone out during the middle of the presentations so it would be a good idea to go over a couple key points at the end.

•   I was concluding my speech on a strong note then used a filler word (um) that made it not as powerful. Really need to work on this.

•  Pausing instead of using a filler word. It is out of habit that I just say "um" so the only way I can stop that is by practicing. I have noticed that when I practice I always deliver the speech way better then I do in class. Maybe practicing with some classmates would help ease the nerves on presentation day.

•   Having a timer visible when presenting. When I practice I always time myself therefor I think it would be a good idea to have a timer with me when I am giving my presentations. Having a timer doesn’t make me nervous, instead it helps keep me on track.

     

Stop:

•       Saying Um. Sounds really unprofessional and makes the presentation less entertaining.

•      Speaking in monotone. I am not aware of this when I am presenting but looking back at the video I realize that at the beginning of my presentation I sounded very dull. When I was going over the consensus I sounded bored. I have to find a way to be more energetic while presenting.

•       Looking back at the screen or reading off the screen. This is something that is very difficult for me because I rely on the slideshow too much. I have to start getting to know the material instead of just memorizing it.

Continue:

•      Using hand gestures for emphasize.

•    Using pictures/videos to show visual examples. I think the clip I showed helped tie my whole presentation together. I also spent more time putting my prezi together and it showed. 

• Although my prezi slides had a ton of information on them (due to siting the source), I did a good job about getting to the main point quickly.

•     Using facial expressions. In other presentations I usually smile and come across friendlier, in this certain presentation I was talking about a more serious topic and adjusted my facial expression and tone of voice to the mood I was trying to set for the audience. I was more serious and direct and used certain words to try to convince the audience.

•   Giving a brief overview of what I will be discussing. Helped the audience know what to look out for.

•  Opening with a hook. I asked a rhetoric question.   Throughout my speech I asked the audience questions to help keep them engaged.

• Practicing/timing myself. 

• Towards the middle to the end of my speech I changed my tone of voice to ask questions or emphasize points.
  

Start.Stop.Continue. speech #2

Start:

·      Introduce myself and give an over-view of what I will be talking about much like Nick’s presentation

·      Be more specific. Give more concrete details about the specific subject I am presenting. For my speech I should have included specific examples on the types of questions the interviewer would ask for someone applying to this position

·      Give more background knowledge on the topic. Emphasize the difference between this job interview and others.

·      Review key points at the end of the presentation. Recapping the main points would help the audience grasp the conventions and moves better.

·      Add more animation/pictures to my prezi to keep the audience engaged. My prezi did not have any pictures and the only animation was the video. This was due to lack of time. Next time I will give myself more time to really learn all the different features of prezi to maximize my presentation.

·      Pausing when needed instead of using filler words.

·      Smiling more. I need to be more energetic throughout my presentation.

·      Use better transitions between ideas or doing a better job at connecting ideas.

·      Be more creative

·      Be more relaxed. Although I had practiced and memorized my presentation I was very tense and it came across in my voice.

Stop:

·      Reading off the screen. Although I was glancing over to see the bullet points I had provided for myself it looked as if I didn’t know what I was going to talk about next.

·      Tugging on clothes. It is distracting to the audience. I tend to do this without thinking because I get nervous.

·      Using filler words such as “uhmm”

·      Moving around. In the beginning of my presentation I was really nervous and started pacing back and forth.

Continue:

·      Using hand gestures to emphasize certain points. I used hand gestures all throughout my speech.

·      Using vocalics. Raising and lowering my voice to emphasize key points

·      Rate of voice. I spoke clearly and loud enough so that the whole class was able to hear even the people in the back.

·      Making eye-contact with the audience

·      Using positive body language. Although I was moving around too much in the beginning, the rest of the presentation I was standing straight and using my hands to point to the screen.

·      Giving examples that are relatable or explain how they personally relate to me. My presentation was based on an actual interview I went through. 

·      Practicing my speech/ getting comfortable speaking. The more I practice the more comfortable I feel. This presentation was a lot better then the first one due to practice.

·      Using videos that clearly highlight what I am discussing. The video I used gave examples of the conventions being broken and it stated why they were being broken.

·      Staying within the time frame. I had practiced and timed myself before presenting to the class so I knew where I should be in the presentation once I hit the 3:30 mark. I did a total of 5:10 in this presentation, which is within the time frame.

Classmates Moves

·      I really enjoyed Daisy’s speech about college tour guides. She was very vivid in her presentation and used body language and hand gestures to emphasize her points and illustrate what a tour guide actually does by walking backwards. She had a lot of energy throughout her presentation, which was really infectious. She raised and lowered her voice to keep the audience engaged. Her presentation was very interactive and it definitely kept me entertained.

·      Nick’s speech was very well put together. I appreciate the fact that he gave a brief overview of what he was going to discuss before he started the actual presentation. The overview of the main points at the end of the presentation helped refresh the audience.  By reviewing the points it helps emphasize the key components of his speech. Nick also prepared the audience on the clip he was showing. He set up the rhetorical situation/example very well and informed the audience of the actual story. When he showed the clip he pointed out the main moves/conventions. If he would of shown the clip without explaining it beforehand I would have been completely lost but by getting the audience caught up with the story we were all able to understand the clip.

·      The police interrogation speech speaker kept the audience hooked by using props (slamming the folder on the desk). The audience didn’t expect it and it woke everyone up

speech #2 rough draft

2^nd Speech Rough Draft

Genre: Job interview (you are interviewing students who are applying to work for EOPS)

•   Introduction

-       Describe the setting (office, outside table, eliminate distractions, who will be there, etc...)

-       Look for certain body language (strong handshake, eye contact, were they on their phone while they were waiting or did they engage in conversation with the receptionist/ another worker)

-       How is the candidate dressed?  (Professionally, casual, well presented) How does this reflect on the candidate?

-        

•      Engage in the interview

Transition: Let me begin by introducing myself…

- First introduce yourself and explain what you do. Describe the position the person is applying for

•   Ask the right questions

Transition: I would like to now ask you a couple of question..

-       Begin with asking them to tell you a little bit about themselves (does the candidate discuss school, family, or work)

-       After, ask candidate what they would do in a certain scenario (i.e. if a student comes up to you wanting help with financial aid where would you refer them to?)

-       Ask them to preform a task on pipeline to test their skills with pipeline

-       Strongest/Weakest Skill (what they respond will be important. Did the candidate explain how they are trying to improve their weakest skill?  Does the candidate’s strong skill apply to the job?)

-       Ask the candidate if they have any previous experience that relates to the job? (Take this time to glance over the resume. Is this candidate apart of our program, did they complete a summer bridge program, are they apart of our club or any other club on campus).

-       Ask the candidate why they want to work for EOPS

•    Closing

 Transition: We are now concluding our interview …

-       Ask them if they have any questions at the end

-       Shake hands

-       Escort them to the door

-       Tell them you will follow up with them. Give them a time frame (within two weeks or something)

-       Review resume in more depth

-       Contact references if necessary

-       Follow up with candidate within the time frame

start.stop.continue.

Start:

·      I need to slow down when presenting. I get nervous and start talking really fast.

·      Speaking more clearly. In the beginning of my speech I was talking so fast that it was hard to make out what I was saying.

·      Projecting my voice.  I tried to project my voice so everyone could hear. There are parts of my speech where my voice was loud and strong, but towards the middle I forgot what my next line was causing me to not speak as strongly. I got nervous and it showed.

·      Being more comfortable on “stage”.  This will come in time but I need to relax so my speech is more convincing.

·      Make my speech longer. My speech was two minutes and nineteen seconds. I was going for two minutes and thirty seconds but I started talking way too fast. It would help if we had a timer up with us that way we know if we need to slow down or speed up.

·      Having better transitions. I need to learn how to transition from points. I did an okay job but I have to do better next time. My nerves caused me to stutter which compromised the fluidity of my speech.

·      Make eye contact with the classroom. In this presentation I found it difficult to make eye contact because I was not sure if I should have been focused on one person rather than making eye contact with everyone.

·      Practicing more. I practiced my speech the day of the presentations so I didn’t give myself enough time to know it by heart completely.

·      Practicing in front of the mirror, in front of an audience, or recording myself before my actual presentation. This will help me get an idea of what facial expressions or hand gestures I should use. Would also help with the nerves.

·      My overall goal was to convince the scholarship foundation to extend their scholarship. My intention was not clear up until the middle of the presentation. I should state my goal at the beginning or make my goal appear clearer.

Stop:

·      Talking with no emotions or in monotone. There are some parts of my speech where I was talking like a robot because I was so focused on delivering my speech just as I had (poorly) practiced that I sounded pretty flat. It sounded like I was reciting my speech rather than me just casually having a conversation with someone as it was intended.

·      Looking down at my notecards. It looked pretty obvious that I did not practice as much as I should of.  I looked down almost after every point I made. I was using my notecards even though I did not need them.

·      Waving my hands so much. I tend to get nervous and start using my hands. Although it is good to use hand gestures when speaking I used too my hands too much which can distract my audience.

·      Looking at the ceiling when I get nervous. It seems I look up to avoid eye

contact.

·      Making it obvious that I messed up. I would roll my eyes when I would stutter bringing more attention to the mistake.  I should just keep going. No one would notice if I had messed up but by me rolling my eyes it made it very obvious.

·      Pausing so much. I know its okay to pause to gain momentum or instead of using filler words but I paused way too much in my speech because I was having a hard time transitioning.

·      Focus on my breathing. I felt rushed and would speed up and then would stop and catch my breath, which resulted in more pausing.

·       

Continue:

·      Pausing instead of using filler words. I was pretty good at not using so many filler words although I did use a few.

·      Use of kinesics. I like that I use my facial expressions to convey a certain emotion. I smiled a bit in my presentation but I could have smiled a lot more.

·      Using good body posture. Standing up straight.

·      At the end of the speech my “follow-up plan of action” was okay. I ended my speech by giving her my contact info. I believe it could of have been stronger but due to my scenario I was not sure how to go about it. Next time I want to end my speech on a stronger level, making the audience feel really convinced of what I was trying to portray.

·      I had good amount of background knowledge that helped me back up my points. I looked up information on the scholarship foundation prior to my presentation that way my points seemed relevant and convincing.

·      Adapting language to audience. My speech was not too formal but it was not too casual.  Made it seem realistic to the best of my ability.